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Essay Prompt

Write about your favorite sport

Essay

Baseball is a sport plaid by 2 teams that each have 9 players. In baseball one team throws a small round ball called a baseball and the other team tries to hit it with a club called a bat. Teams get points by running and touching markers on the ground called "bases". There is another sport called softball that is similar and is often played by woman.

Many people in north america, south america, and East Asia play baseball. In the United States, baseball is called the national pastime, because so many people in the United States spend a lot of time playin or watchin games. more people go to Major League Baseball games than go to see all the other team sports. But on TV, more people like to see American football and car racing.

Baseball is a sport plaid played by 2 two 1 teams that each have 9 players. In baseball , one team throws a small round ball called a baseball and the other team tries to hit it with a club called a bat. Teams get points by running and touching markers on the ground called "bases". There is another sport called softball that is similar and is often played by woman women sp .


Many people in north america North America, south america South America 2 , and East Asia play baseball. In the United States, baseball is called the national pastime, because so many people in the United States spend a lot of time playin playing sp or watchin watching sp games. more More people go to Major League Baseball games than go to see all the other team sports. But on TV, more people like to see watch American football and car racing.

 

Baseball is a sport played by two1 teams that each have 9 players. In baseball, one team throws a small round ball called a baseball and the other team tries to hit it with a club called a bat. Teams get points by running and touching markers on the ground called "bases". There is another sport called softball that is similar and is often played by womensp.


Many people in North America, South America2, and East Asia play baseball. In the United States, baseball is called the national pastime, because so many people in the United States spend a lot of time playingsp or watchingsp games. More people go to Major League Baseball games than go to see all the other team sports. But on TV, more people like to watch American football and car racing.

 



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Grade Comments

Good job overall. Pay special attention to capitalization and spelling of particular words.


Categories

Category Grade
Grammer & Punctuation 8/10
Organization and Focus 10/10
Flow 10/10
Sentence Variety 9/10
Vocabulary Usage 9/10
Spelling 8/10
Compelling Introduction 10/10
Thesis Statement 10/10
Quality of Ideas 10/10
Topic Development 10/10
Effective Conclusion 8/10

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